WGOM CW Survivor Archives – Challenge 19* – Rashomon

After the great outpouring of grief over my not doing the last challenge (let me live in my fantasy world, please), I decided to dash off something real quick. This doesn’t really count, because I already read the other writer’s entries and the judges comments, so I had some ideas what worked, what didn’t, and how others approached it, so consider this something separate from the challenge that happens to follow the same rules.

The rules were to write the same scene from two points of view:

Identilock Employee #74

“Matthew Bernard Achmatowicz”

Identilock Employee #74 muttered under his breath as he waited for his boss (Identilock Employee #13) to appear.  Ever since he had found the files that his company had taken great pains to hide, he had known this was coming.  The only thing left was to discover whether he could convince them to keep him around.  Otherwise he’d be Garbage Collector #4782 by the end of the day.  He thought he had the right information to save his job.  He tried to keep his expression calm, but this was the moment of truth.  He had to stay focused.

The door opened.  His superior entered slowly, obviously not relishing what he had to do.  He sat across from #74 and pondered his underling for a moment before beginning.  He started with a lot of unnecessary introduction, and #74 had to block out this rambling account and keep his focus on what was important.  He tried to stop the babbling by sheer force of will.  “Stop!” he thought at his manager, “just tell me what you decided.”

“So I have arrived at the conclusion that …” #13 paused, seeming to fight against saying the rest of his sentence, “… I will give you a raise and a promotion.”  He finished through gritted teeth.  He stiffly shook #74’s hand and hurried out of the room.

Identilock Employee #13

Identilock Employee #13 paused outside the door.  He hated firing people, especially in this case, because the tech guys said Employee #74’s file couldn’t be found.  It was easier when you had that weapon in your back pocket to remove dissent if necessary.  Nonetheless, this was his job, and stalling wouldn’t help anything.

He entered the room and sat across from #74, who seemed unnaturally calm for someone who would be Garbage Collector #4782 by the end of the day.  Not for the first time, #13 wondered what he could have found on his illegal sprint through the company’s files.  No time for that.  Onward.

He began his termination speech: “You know security is the number one priority here at Identilock.  People trust us with their true names; the names that hold the power of free will.  You know this.  If that security is breached someone could control the actions of anyone whose true name they found merely by saying it aloud.  Therefore, if unlawful access is gained to the database, company policy is to immediately …”

He stopped.   It was time to tell #74 what he had decided.  Normally he had another couple of sentences to dull the impact of the termination, but it seemed like now was the right time.  “So I have arrived at the conclusion that …” Wait, he thought, this is wrong. This isn’t what I decided.  Don’t say it! “… I will give you a raise and a promotion.”


4 thoughts on “WGOM CW Survivor Archives – Challenge 19* – Rashomon

  1. I was so certain that this was a movie reference that I Googled “Identilock.” Daneeka’s Ghost was the second result, so it appears not.

    I like. This one really has two different characters (impressive, since they’re intentionally made to look like interchangeable corporate monkeys) with extremely different perspectives, which was only a mild success of those still in the game.

    • Thanks, spooky. Having read the other ones helped in the “differentiate betwixt the characters” thing I think. This one was fun. I wish I had spent more time on it.

      Think of this one as a first draft of what I might have submitted were I still in the game and thus more motivated.

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